Hi it’s Lily
If you have any questions please don’t be afraid to ask me if I haven’t explained something properly or you don’t understand
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Hi my name is Lily,
I’m 10 years old . When I was 8 years old in 2015 I got a disease called diabetes. Sometimes find it hard but it doesn’t stop me from doing any thing because I sill do swimming, dancing, girl guides and I used to do gymnastics. My favourite sport is dancing with my friends.
I love my family and friends. My favourite thing to do at home is playing on my trampoline with friends and my brother Oliver and my sister Evelyn.